Final Persuasive Letter

Andrea Hunt                          

21480 W. 123^rd Terrace

Olathe, KS 66061

May 22, 2011

Mr. Court Allam

21300 College Blvd.

Olathe, KS 66061

Dear Mr. Allam:

            Do you see that girl in the front constantly raising her hand to answer questions, ready to engage in all the activities? Well, that girl is me, Andrea. We are approaching the end of the year and grades must be given. I personally believe that I deserve an A. I should get an A because I am very engaged in the class and I have improved this year especially in my writing.

            Some teachers would believe that I don’t deserve an A. They might say that she has been absent a lot an does not have a couple of her blogs turned in. This might be true, however, I have always came in to see what I’ve missed and have caught up. Also, I do not believe that just a couple of things missing should bring down one’s grade by a whole letter. That is one of the reasons we created the 3P grading system. Furthermore, my participation and improvement in the class completely trumps both of these problems.

            Most of this year I have been very engaged in class, especially during second semester. Mr. Allam says, “She is very engaged.” This shows that even you have noticed my participation. There are many ways I have participated and engaged myself in the class. First, during journals I participate by sharing my journal. During gallery walks I give my opinion on the painting and what I believe it is. I have also gone above and beyond by commenting on people’s blog posts and giving my opinion and feedback on their writing. In all this ways and more, I have engaged myself in the class.

            Another reason I deserve an A is because I have improved tremendously in my writing. Mr. Allam says, “[Andrea has] improved her persuasive writing using different techniques, and her organization in her writing has improved.” This statement is proven just by the way I have written this letter. You can see the different techniques by my use of ethos in this paragraph and the one before it. Also you can distinguish my thesis statement and my refutation very well. All of this shows how much I have improved in my writing.

            In all, I deserve an A for my grade. I have been engaged in class. Second, I have improved my writing skills. This letter shows you all of these things. Therefore I deserve an A because of my participation in class and my improved writing skills.

Sincerely,

L. Andrea Hunt

Until Angels Close My Eyes/ The Hunger Games

I have finished reading Until Angels Close My Eyes by Lurlene McDaniel and at the moment I'm reading The Hunger Games by Suzanne Collins.

 Until Angels Close My Eyes

If I were Lurlene McDaniel I would have made the story a little happier. I would have have done a couple of things different. First, I would have had Eli come back to talk to his father, or atleast send a letter to his family. Second I would have had Ethan stay with Leah or atleast have Leah's step-dad, Neil, live and recover from his cancer.

The intended audience is for young adult girls. However, this book was so good that even guys would like it. The main character being a girl is more appealing to the female side. Also, the romance is more girly and femine.

The Hunger Games

I wonder what kind of sick mind would think of this. The idea to send kids to fight to the death for the amusement of others and as punishment is so hedious and disgusting. How could someone even think of making kids do that, even if it is just a book. I wonder how she came up with that idea. What ispired her to do write this book. I wonder if this book is a warning to society about how our world could turn out.

If I were Katniss I dont think I could go through all the things she did. There are so many hardships she had to endure. First the loss of her father and then almost starving to death. Then constantly risking her life so she can provide for her family and herself. That all would just overwhelm me. Then to have my sisters name called to be enter in this game would be horrible. Then to go through the whole game and pretend I am in love with someone I barely know and feeling that I am in love with someone else is just horrible. I just dont think I could handle it all.

The intended audience is for young adults and teens. However anybody could read this book. It is filled with adventure and mystery. You will get pulled in immediatly. Once you start you are not going to want to put it down. This is a great book and you should really read it.